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Post by Devastatingly Yours on Sept 29, 2003 22:03:44 GMT -5
A type of poetry where the second and fourth line become the first and third line in the next stanza (brief explanation before I show you all the pantoum I made for my creative writing class)
Black Bars My errant feathered friend You woke me from my sleep Calling avian curses down You claimed I came to close
You woke me from my sleep Flapping both your wings You claimed I came too close I'm the one who got that cage
Flapping both your wings A challenge in your beak I'm the one who got that cage But you won't let me near
A challenge in your beak The food is outside your reach I'm the one who got that cage I still buy the seeds you eat
The food is outside your reach Your anger is a waste of time I still buy the seeds you eat If I wasn't here you'd starve
Your anger is a waste of time The cage keeps you barred If I wasn't here you'd starve You're trapped while I say so
The cage keeps you barred Little bird, fluttering in panic You're trapped while I say so All your efforts are worthless
Little bird, fluttering in panic Why do you seek to be free? All your efforts are worthless I will not let you go for now
Why do you seek to be free? The power of flight is useless I will not let you go for now Your freedom is mine to keep.
by the way, this is a metaphor...if that was not obvious
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Post by geneva on Sept 29, 2003 22:59:01 GMT -5
that's coool can the last and next to next to last lines also double as the very first and third?
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Post by Devastatingly Yours on Sept 29, 2003 23:13:29 GMT -5
I really wouldn't know.
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Post by Archagon on Sept 30, 2003 0:13:22 GMT -5
Neato. That's cool.
If you want a challenge, my music teacher says the hardest form to write is (I forgot what it's called for now). In it there are 12 sonnets, and the first line of each is the last line of the preceding one, and the last line of the last one is the first line of the first one. So it's a cycle. I ought to try that sometime.
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Post by Devastatingly Yours on Sept 30, 2003 1:17:38 GMT -5
bleh...
That's not a challenge.
You don't understand, poetry is not a challenge for me...poetry of any kind
(not to say that I am too terribly good at it, just...my creativity is mostly boundless)
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Post by Archagon on Sept 30, 2003 13:45:27 GMT -5
I mean not challenge, but you know, a lengthy project which would require some time to work on.
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Post by Devastatingly Yours on Sept 30, 2003 16:32:15 GMT -5
*wince* That was the point...it WOULDN'T take awhile. Truth be told, I don't have awhile, what with the hard work expected from my college.
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Post by Archagon on Sept 30, 2003 17:55:47 GMT -5
Oh, well, whatever then. Still, have you ever written one of those?
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Post by Devastatingly Yours on Sept 30, 2003 20:10:16 GMT -5
Yeah, I've written them before.
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Post by Archagon on Sept 30, 2003 20:26:17 GMT -5
Neato. Post it here!
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Post by Devastatingly Yours on Sept 30, 2003 20:29:35 GMT -5
Sorry, those were for assignments while I was still in highschool. I suppose I could at some point in time write a few more, but right now school's a bit more important.
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Post by geneva on Oct 1, 2003 0:51:13 GMT -5
You have you riorities set if not the best way, at least a very decent way. lovelyfull
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Post by Devastatingly Yours on Oct 1, 2003 15:37:42 GMT -5
It's not that I do not care for other things, and make time for other things...it is that it is very important for me to get through this on my own terms. That requires having a good college education.
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