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Post by Archagon on Sept 29, 2003 23:16:57 GMT -5
'Twas in a book I found thee; Once I was sifting through the pages, And there - behold! - your shining eyes Surprized me like no other had before; I had to know, what was this face, This face that mirrored so my own? So I read on; and soon I found The many years of loneliness and strife. I found in text your endless tears And shadows, gleaming from your eyes; I knew it then, as I do now, Together we were meant to be! Alas, I came upon the tale's end; With trembling hands I read of how you centuries ago Had left this mortal plane for better ones beyond. And thus, the missing half of me Forevermore was gone. I wandered then into the night alone With but a teardrop to commemorate The passing of my heart.
I don't like the shortness of the last line, but I had not much time to go over this.
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Post by Dark Angel on Sept 29, 2003 23:59:38 GMT -5
(five minutes pass) Wow. Just wow.
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Post by Devastatingly Yours on Sept 30, 2003 16:38:00 GMT -5
It is beautiful. The idea that one could find, too late their own soul's half...tragic, yet full of meaning to us all, I'm sure.
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Post by Archagon on Sept 30, 2003 18:06:30 GMT -5
Thank you for the comments. Although I honestly didn't expect this kind of positive feedback...
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Post by Nature's Fury on Sept 30, 2003 22:47:00 GMT -5
I'm floored. you just scribbled this down? Scribble more often, this is beautiful! *big pleading eyes* Can I put this in my zine? please? Its amazing!
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Post by Dark Angel on Sept 30, 2003 23:15:36 GMT -5
Yeah, let her! So more people can share the pleasure of reading this.
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Post by Archagon on Sept 30, 2003 23:43:59 GMT -5
Oh sure.
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Post by >>The Neon One on Sept 30, 2003 23:45:45 GMT -5
quite lovely, Alexei. Don't you love it when poetry just sorta seems to appear out of nowhere?
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Post by Archagon on Oct 1, 2003 0:06:08 GMT -5
Thank you all very very much.
Yeah, most of the best poems that I write come from an emotion - the words just write themselves - but this one I just kindof wrote down off the top of my head...
[still in somewhat of a shock]
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