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Post by A Shy Cat on Apr 29, 2004 17:57:01 GMT -5
UntitledMoonlight pours down on broken stone, a broken body, a broken soul. Tears flow down the broken stone, been there long, so a river flows. She broke hre hear and soul in two; after leaving him leaning on a tomb. Her friendship was all she knew. She lost that attraction and love anew. She of the broken body threw herself there, not caring at all who saw her -- BREAK. soo yeah.... >.<
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Post by bezzerkker on Apr 29, 2004 18:18:00 GMT -5
*claps* good poem, nice 'n' sad
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Post by Archagon on Apr 29, 2004 22:44:20 GMT -5
Wonderful, really, but "Tears flow down the broken stone" seems disruptive with the repetition of "broken stone".
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Post by Antid on May 1, 2004 19:41:36 GMT -5
I like it more with that repitition
To Shy Cat: Are we acquainted?
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Post by A Shy Cat on May 3, 2004 1:16:08 GMT -5
hmm... interesting... most stuff i don't change so everything is a first draft... i think i meant for it to change with that line of "Tears" but i don't know... it is kinda raw emotion..... and Magister, I do not think we have met... unless you were at a superbowl party w/ bezzerkker.... umm err i gues thanks for the praise/critism... ~ Cat
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Post by bezzerkker on May 3, 2004 15:34:30 GMT -5
he wasn't and no, you two haven't met, not to my knowledge at least
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Post by geneva on May 3, 2004 19:45:23 GMT -5
is this the neko-chan i think it is?
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Post by bezzerkker on May 3, 2004 20:00:08 GMT -5
nope, it isn't stacy
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Post by geneva on May 3, 2004 20:03:55 GMT -5
oh. to many cats in this world... qui est-ce que c'est?
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Post by bezzerkker on May 3, 2004 20:08:38 GMT -5
*blinks in confusion* no, I wouldn't like fries with that? o.O
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Post by KillinKrillan on May 3, 2004 21:02:30 GMT -5
She asked "who is it"
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Post by Arachis on May 3, 2004 21:26:06 GMT -5
of course you could have said more simply....
"Qui est-ce?
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Post by geneva on May 3, 2004 21:55:06 GMT -5
I'm not sure I've ever been known to say anything in such a manner that would save breath/time/ears or anything else that others might value over words....
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Post by Haku on May 3, 2004 22:16:08 GMT -5
cool...I like it!
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Post by A Shy Cat on May 4, 2004 16:46:58 GMT -5
Thank you Narla *blush*
oh! and I won't tell you who I am so don't bother asking. so there *sticks tounge out at people* i enjoy being a mystery
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